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You were the love of my life some time ago
Broke off from the others, I tried to find you
My shining star, I long to be part of your
Heart, to be held by you, loved by you.

And when you hid away, ran from me
I fled the scene - you embarrased me
Got to get out, I thought, get away
Over the hurdles I ran, and sheltered
You were the last thing on my mind.

But as easy as it was to get over you
Sometimes I sit back and think, wonder
I could've tried, another opportunity to
Regret - what might have been?
It burns inside me, nagging doubt
All my questions waiting to be answered.

I don't know the situation anymore, and
Still that feeling persists, I wish that my
Love had absolutely nothing to do with
You, because...
©2005-2009 ~CreativeFlair
:iconcreativeflair:

Author's Comments

No edit. Straight from the heart. Is writer's block lifted? i hope so. Secretl message included, try find it, add it to the end of the poem!
xxx

:EDIT: The message? Think about it... The poem ends with "You, because..." and from there, you go back to the first word of the first line. Then to the first word of the second line, and then the first word of the third line. Get it? So the poem ends differently when you add the secret message =)

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:iconmcr-girl:
I'm getting a hint of suicide near the end. please don't tell me that I'm right.

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~I wrote this song about you, just to let you know that I hate your guts, and I think you suck!~
:iconjustcantdecide:
thats great. im not sure if its happy or sad. i guess it doesnt have to be either, does it?

writer's block broken

--
I never give in
I never give up
Believe it or not
I just wanna be loved
:iconcreativeflair:
it's a bit of both i suppose
hurrah!
xxx

--
Decorated./Matryoshka
:iconjustcantdecide:
huzzah!

Jennifer.

Jennicle.

Like....

Genital.

Why didnt u respond to my other comments

--
I never give in
I never give up
Believe it or not
I just wanna be loved
:iconmcr-girl:
hmm I just kinda got that heavy vibe at the end, coz it's like I can't love you because...and it's like coz I can't take it. I dunno *shrugs* I'm very bitter about love I guess lol
great piece tho!
Angehx

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~I wrote this song about you, just to let you know that I hate your guts, and I think you suck!~
:iconspamuel:
izit to do with an addiction to something else, like smoking or drinking or summin?

i like this poem, your writers block is truly smashed! :D

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The Moving Finger writes, and, having writ,
Moves on; nor all your Piety nor Wit
Shall lure it back to cancel half a Line,
Nor all your Tears blot out a Word of it.
:iconcreativeflair:
lol, Love is a bitter thing!
xxx

--
Decorated./Matryoshka
:iconcreativeflair:
hahaha! where did that come from?!
What other comments?
xxx

--
Decorated./Matryoshka

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